# Business Communication Concept Card: [Your memo, deck or course]

> A concept card on writing and presenting for decision makers, the communication thread that runs through every MBA
> core course, case write-up, internship and job. It covers the pyramid principle (answer first, then grouped support),
> the structure of an executive summary and a decision memo, building a storyline whose slide titles state the point,
> data visualisation for executives, and plain writing, with a fully worked before-and-after memo rewrite. It is for MBA
> students, applicants preparing written cases and presentations, and managers who write for senior readers. The
> examples use Northfield Outdoor Co., Corvane Robotics and Tallow Creek Medical Center, all fictional; all data are
> invented.
> Source basis: Minto's pyramid principle (Minto 2009, revised edition), Flesch (1948), Tufte (1983), Cleveland and McGill (1984) and US federal plain
> language guidance, written up in original words and examples. Every number was computed in Python and is shown with
> the Excel formula where one applies.
> Replace every [bracketed] value and every row marked *Example*.

<!--
Guidance: How to use this template
- Read "The idea in plain language" and the pyramid diagram first. The single habit that changes most business
  writing is putting the answer first.
- Study Worked example A (the memo rewrite) line by line, then do Worked example B (a storyline) before you look at the
  answer key, and Exercise C on a real or fictional decision.
- Before you send any memo or deck, run the checklist in "Common mistakes and misconceptions".
- Answer the self-test from memory, then check the answer key. Revisit after two days and after a week (spacing).
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## Document control

<!-- Guidance: Record the audience and the decision first. A memo without a named decision maker and a deadline is usually an update, not a decision document. -->

| Field | Value |
|---|---|
| Course or project | [Management communication / case write-up / internship / work document] |
| Author | [Your name] |
| Audience and decision maker | [Chief operating officer, Northfield Outdoor Co. (fictional) / your reader] |
| Decision requested and deadline | [Approve store closure by YYYY-MM-DD] |
| Format | [Memo / executive summary / slide deck / email] |
| Reviewed by | [Tutor, writing coach, colleague or manager] |
| Last updated | YYYY-MM-DD |
| Version | [0.1] |

## When to use it

<!-- Guidance: Pick the format from the reader's situation, not from habit. A decision needs a memo or a short deck; an explanation needs a report; a status needs a dashboard or a few lines. -->

Use this card whenever a busy reader must understand, decide or act on what you write: a case write-up, a
recommendation to a professor playing the client, an internship final presentation, a board paper or an email to a
senior manager.

| Situation | Format | Lead with |
|---|---|---|
| A decision is needed | Decision memo (one to two pages) or a short deck | The recommendation and what you need from the reader |
| A long report must be read by people who will not read it all | Executive summary on page one | The answer, the three reasons, the key numbers |
| A meeting will discuss a complex choice | Deck with a storyline of action titles, pre-read sent in advance | The governing thought in the first slide after the title |
| A recurring update | Status note or dashboard (`business/status-report`) | What changed and what needs attention |
| An announcement | Internal memo (`business/memo`) | What happens, to whom, from when |

Do not use the answer-first structure blindly where the reader must be brought along slowly: a hostile audience, bad
news to people affected, or a culture where a direct recommendation from a junior writer would be resented. Even then,
know your answer first and decide consciously how and when to reveal it.

## The idea in plain language

<!-- Guidance: Say your own governing thought out loud in one breath. If you cannot, you are not ready to write. -->

Senior readers have little time and many documents. They read the first lines, decide whether the rest matters, and
look for what they must decide. Good business writing is therefore built from the top down:

1. **Answer first.** State the recommendation or main conclusion at the start, then support it. This is the core of
   Minto's pyramid principle: ideas form a pyramid, with one governing thought at the top, a few key supporting points
   below it, and evidence below each of those.
2. **Group and order the support.** Each level summarises the ideas below it. Ideas in a group are of the same kind
   (three reasons, three steps, three options), they do not overlap and together they cover the point (often called
   MECE: mutually exclusive, collectively exhaustive). The order is logical: by time, by structure or by importance.
3. **Answer the reader's next question.** Each statement raises a question ("why?", "how?", "what does it cost?") and
   the level below answers it. Minto describes this as a question-and-answer dialogue between writer and reader.
4. **Introduce with a story the reader already accepts.** The situation (what the reader knows), the complication (what
   changed or what is at stake) and the question it raises lead straight to your answer. Keep it short: two to four
   sentences.

Slides follow the same logic. Each slide title is a full sentence that states the point of the slide ("Dalton Street
is the only loss-making store"), not a topic label ("Store performance"). Read in sequence, the titles alone tell the
whole argument. Charts make one comparison obvious and do not distort the data. Sentences are short, active and
concrete, with numbers where numbers matter.

```mermaid
flowchart TD
  G["Governing thought: close Dalton Street at the lease break and open a pickup point"]
  G --> K1["Key point 1: the store loses money"]
  G --> K2["Key point 2: most of its customers can be kept online"]
  G --> K3["Key point 3: the exit pays back fast and the downside is limited"]
  K1 --> E1["Loss of USD 0.42m on USD 3.60m revenue"]
  K1 --> E2["Only store of eight with negative contribution"]
  K2 --> E3["Online orders from nearby postcodes growing"]
  K2 --> E4["Pickup point keeps a local presence"]
  K3 --> E5["Payback about one year at 55 percent retention"]
  K3 --> E6["Saves USD 0.30m a year even with zero retention"]
```

## Formulas and notation

<!-- Guidance: These measures are aids, not goals. Use them to compare drafts of the same text, never to judge a document alone. -->

| Symbol | Meaning |
|---|---|
| $W$, $S$, $Y$ | Number of words, sentences and syllables in a passage |
| $FRE$ | Flesch Reading Ease score (higher is easier; about 60 to 70 is plain English for adults) |
| $LF$ | Tufte's lie factor of a chart |
| $\Delta_{shown}$, $\Delta_{data}$ | Relative change shown by the graphic, relative change in the data |
| $DIR$ | Data-ink ratio |

**Flesch Reading Ease** (Flesch 1948):

$$FRE = 206.835 - 1.015\,\frac{W}{S} - 84.6\,\frac{Y}{W}$$

For example, a passage of 120 words in 4 sentences with 198 syllables scores $206.835 - 1.015 \times 30 - 84.6 \times
1.65 = 36.8$ (hard); the same 120 words in 8 sentences with 168 syllables scores $73.2$ (fairly easy). Excel:
`=206.835-1.015*(120/4)-84.6*(198/120)`. Shorter sentences and shorter words both raise the score.

**Lie factor** (Tufte 1983): the ratio of the effect shown in a graphic to the effect in the data. A faithful chart has
$LF$ close to 1.

$$LF = \frac{\Delta_{shown}}{\Delta_{data}}$$

**Data-ink ratio** (Tufte 1983): the share of a graphic's ink that shows data rather than frames, grids and
decoration. It is a principle more than a measurement; remove ink that does not inform.

$$DIR = \frac{\text{ink used to show data}}{\text{total ink used in the graphic}}$$

**Example (fictional).** Corvane Robotics' gross margin rose from 30.0 to 31.5 percent, a relative change of
$\Delta_{data} = 1.5/30.0 = 0.050$. A bar chart with the axis starting at 29.0 percent draws bars of height 1.0 and 2.5,
a visible change of $\Delta_{shown} = (2.5 - 1.0)/1.0 = 1.500$. $LF = 1.500/0.050 = 30.0$: the chart exaggerates the
improvement thirty-fold. Bars must start at zero; if a small change matters, show it as a number or with a dot plot
labelled with the change.

## Assumptions and limits

<!-- Guidance: Know when the standard advice does not apply, so you can break it on purpose rather than by accident. -->

- **Answer first assumes you have an answer.** In exploratory work, state the question, what you know and what you
  will do next; do not fake a recommendation.
- **Readability scores measure surface features.** They ignore logic, accuracy and whether the reader knows the terms.
  A text full of short, vague sentences can score well and say nothing. Syllable counts also differ between tools by a
  few points.
- **Culture and hierarchy matter.** Some organisations and countries expect context before the conclusion, or
  agreement from stakeholders before a written recommendation. Adapt the order of the introduction, not the clarity of
  the thinking.
- **Decks are not documents.** A slide deck read without a presenter needs fuller sentences than one that is
  presented. Decide which you are writing.
- **Grouping in threes is a habit, not a rule.** Use as many groups as the logic needs, usually two to five.
- **Charts can mislead without lying.** Choice of baseline, period and comparison group shapes the message; disclose
  them.

## How managers use it

<!-- Guidance: For each use, think of a document you have written in the last month and how it would change. -->

- **Decision memos.** Recommendation in the first sentence, then the reasons, the numbers, the risks and the specific
  decision needed with a date. Many senior readers decide from the first paragraph and read the rest only if they
  disagree.
- **Executive summaries.** A stand-alone page that a reader can forward without the report. It answers what, why, how
  much, what risk and what next. Write it last, put it first.
- **Ghost decks and storylines.** Before any analysis is finished, teams write the slide titles they expect to prove,
  then do the analysis and rewrite titles to match what the data show. The storyline keeps work focused; the rewrite
  keeps it honest.
- **Board and investor papers.** Boards need the question they are asked to decide, the options considered and the
  risks, not the full working (`startup/board-deck`).
- **Email to senior people.** Subject line states the ask ("Approval needed by 15 Jan: Dalton Street closure"); first
  line repeats it; details below.
- **Writing as thinking.** Writing the pyramid exposes gaps: a key point with no evidence, a group that overlaps, a
  recommendation that does not follow. Fix the thinking, then the prose.

Plain language is also public policy in some places: in the United States, the Plain Writing Act of 2010 requires
federal agencies to write public documents clearly, and the government's plain language guidance (now published on
digital.gov) sets out the practices: know the audience, organise for the reader, use short sentences, active voice and
common words, and test with real readers. The guidance is written for government but applies to any business
document.

## Data visualisation for executives

<!-- Guidance: Pick the chart from the comparison you want the reader to make. Then write the title as the conclusion of that comparison. -->

Cleveland and McGill (1984) tested how accurately people read quantities from different graphical encodings. Position
along a common scale was read most accurately, followed by position on non-aligned scales, length, then angle and
slope, then area, with volume and colour saturation least accurate. The practical rule: encode the comparison that
matters as position or length on a common baseline.

| Comparison the reader must make | Chart that works | Avoid |
|---|---|---|
| Rank items (stores, products) | Sorted horizontal bar chart starting at zero | Pie chart with many slices |
| Change over time | Line chart, few series, direct labels | 3D columns, dual axes without a clear reason |
| Part of a whole (two to four parts) | Single stacked bar or a simple table | Donut with ten segments |
| Bridge from one total to another | Waterfall chart | Separate bars the reader must subtract |
| Relationship between two measures | Scatter plot with a labelled outlier | Two line charts side by side |
| A few exact numbers | A table or the number in the title | A chart that hides the numbers |

Executive chart checklist: a title that states the point; units and period in the subtitle or axis; bars from zero;
direct labels instead of a legend where possible; one highlight colour for the item that matters and grey for the rest;
the source and date below the chart.

The chart below applies the checklist to the Northfield store review (fictional data, contribution after store costs,
USD m, last financial year).

```vega-lite
{
  "$schema": "https://vega.github.io/schema/vega-lite/v5.json",
  "title": {"text": "Dalton Street is the only loss-making store", "subtitle": "Store contribution after rent, staff and other store costs, USD m, last financial year (fictional)"},
  "width": 380,
  "height": 220,
  "data": {"values": [
    {"store": "Harbour Road", "contribution": 0.73}, {"store": "Mill Square", "contribution": 0.56},
    {"store": "Pine Hills", "contribution": 0.45}, {"store": "Riverside", "contribution": 0.38},
    {"store": "Lakeview", "contribution": 0.25}, {"store": "Old Town", "contribution": 0.17},
    {"store": "Westgate", "contribution": 0.08}, {"store": "Dalton Street", "contribution": -0.42}
  ]},
  "mark": "bar",
  "encoding": {
    "y": {"field": "store", "type": "nominal", "sort": "-x", "title": null},
    "x": {"field": "contribution", "type": "quantitative", "title": "Contribution (USD m)"},
    "color": {"condition": {"test": "datum.contribution < 0", "value": "firebrick"}, "value": "gray"}
  }
}
```

The total contribution of the eight stores is USD 2.20m; Dalton Street alone subtracts USD 0.42m from it.

## Worked example A (fully solved): rewriting a decision memo

<!-- Guidance: Compare the two versions sentence by sentence. Mark where the recommendation, the numbers and the ask appear in each. -->

**Situation (fictional).** A retail analyst at Northfield Outdoor Co. must ask the chief operating officer to approve
closing the Dalton Street store. The underlying numbers (USD m): revenue 3.60; gross margin 42 percent, so gross profit
1.512; store costs 1.93 (rent 0.86, staff 0.84, other 0.23); contribution $1.512 - 1.93 = -0.418$. After closure, the
team expects 55 percent of the store's revenue to move online (1.98) at a 38 percent gross margin (0.7524), less
fulfilment at 9 percent of that revenue (0.1782) and a pickup-point fee of 0.12, giving a contribution of 0.4542. One-off
exit costs are 0.90 (lease exit 0.65, severance 0.25).

**Step 1: compute the numbers the reader needs.**

| Measure | Value | Excel |
|---|---|---|
| Contribution now | USD -0.418m | `=3.6*0.42-(0.86+0.84+0.23)` |
| Contribution after closure, 55% retained | USD 0.454m | `=3.6*0.55*(0.38-0.09)-0.12` |
| Annual improvement | USD 0.872m | `=0.4542-(-0.418)` |
| Simple payback | 1.03 years | `=0.9/0.8722` |
| Three-year NPV at 9% | USD 1.308m | `=NPV(9%,0.8722,0.8722,0.8722)-0.9` |
| Annual improvement if no sales move online | USD 0.298m | `=-0.12-(-0.418)` |
| Payback if no sales move online | 3.02 years | `=0.9/0.298` |
| Three-year NPV at 9% if no sales move online | USD -0.146m | `=NPV(9%,0.298,0.298,0.298)-0.9` |

**Step 2: the original draft (before).**

> As you know, the retail team has been looking at store performance for some time now, and over the last quarter we
> carried out a detailed review of all eight stores, including footfall, conversion, staffing and lease terms, with
> input from finance, property and the e-commerce team. The review raised a number of interesting points about how
> customer behaviour is changing, particularly the growth in online orders from postcodes near some of our stores. In
> the case of Dalton Street, revenue was USD 3.60m last year and, after rent, staff and other costs, the store made a
> loss of about USD 0.42m, although it should be noted that there are several factors to consider, including the lease
> break option that becomes available next March and the possibility that some customers would move to our website.
> Taking all of this into account, it may be worth considering whether the store should be closed, subject to further
> discussion.

**Step 3: diagnose.** The draft is chronological (what we did, then what we found, then a tentative idea). The
recommendation is in the last sentence and hedged ("it may be worth considering"). The decisive numbers (payback,
downside) are missing. There is no ask and no deadline, although the lease break creates one. Sentences average 39
words.

**Step 4: the rewrite (after).**

> We recommend closing the Dalton Street store at the lease break next March and opening a pickup point nearby. The
> store lost USD 0.42m last year on revenue of USD 3.60m. If 55% of its sales move online, profit improves by USD 0.87m
> a year and the USD 0.90m exit cost pays back in about one year. Even if no customer moves online, closure still saves
> USD 0.30m a year. We need your approval by 15 January to give notice on the lease.

**Step 5: measure the change.** Syllables were counted with a simple vowel-group rule, so the Flesch scores are a
heuristic, not an exact measurement: a second rule-based counter gave about 41 before and 77 after. Read the direction
and size of the change, not the decimals.

| Measure | Before | After |
|---|---|---|
| Words | 156 | 83 |
| Sentences | 4 | 5 |
| Words per sentence | 39.0 | 16.6 |
| Syllables per word (approximate) | 1.56 | 1.48 |
| Flesch Reading Ease (approximate) | 35.5 | 64.6 |
| Position of the recommendation | Last sentence, hedged | First sentence |
| Decision and deadline stated | No | Yes |

**Step 6: check the rewrite against the numbers and the risks.** Every figure in the rewrite matches Step 1 (0.87 is
0.8722 rounded; 0.30 is 0.298 rounded). The rewrite states the downside honestly: with zero retention the closure
still saves money each year, but the three-year NPV is slightly negative (USD -0.146m), so the case depends on keeping
some customers. The full memo should say this in the risk paragraph, together with what the team will do to keep
customers (pickup point, targeted offers). Hiding the downside to make the recommendation look stronger would be a
mistake in both ethics and persuasion: the chief operating officer's finance team will find it.

**Step 7: the rest of the memo.** Below the opening paragraph: (1) why the store loses money (rent rose at the last
renewal, footfall fell), (2) why customers can be kept (online order growth from nearby postcodes, pickup point), (3)
the economics with the table and the zero-retention case, (4) risks and mitigations (staff redeployment, local
reputation, retention lower than planned), (5) next steps and owners. Each paragraph starts with its point.

## Worked example B (half solved): a storyline of action titles

<!-- Guidance: Fill each [ ] with a full-sentence title that states the point. Read all titles in order: they must tell the argument without the slides. -->

**Situation (fictional).** Corvane Robotics, a growth-stage warehouse-robotics company, will ask its board to approve
a second production line. The analysis shows: order backlog has grown for six quarters and now equals nine months of
output; the current line runs at 94 percent utilisation and lead times have doubled; two large customers have said
they will not reorder at current lead times; the second line costs USD 14m and pays back in about four years in the
base case; the main risk is a slowdown in warehouse automation spending, which a phased build reduces.

| Slide | Topic label (weak) | Action title (strong) |
|---|---|---|
| 1 | Recommendation | We recommend approving a phased second production line for USD 14m |
| 2 | Backlog | [ ] |
| 3 | Capacity | Our only line runs at 94 percent utilisation, and lead times have doubled |
| 4 | Customers | [ ] |
| 5 | Financials | [ ] |
| 6 | Risks | [ ] |
| 7 | Decision | We ask the board to approve phase one today and phase two at the [ ] review |

Questions to complete:

1. Write the four missing titles (slides 2, 4, 5, 6) and complete slide 7.
2. Which slides form the "why act" group and which the "why this option" group in the pyramid?
3. For slide 3, which chart would you use, and what would its title and highlight be?
4. Write the situation, complication and question for the opening (two to three sentences).

## Exercise C (unsolved): an executive summary for the emergency department

<!-- Guidance: Use the numbers from Worked example A in mba/mba-queueing-card. Keep the summary under 200 words. -->

**Situation (fictional).** Tallow Creek Medical Center's emergency department staffs 3 physicians between 10:00 and
14:00. A queueing analysis (`mba/mba-queueing-card`, Worked example A) shows an average wait for a physician of 35.11
minutes, with 52.0 percent of patients waiting more than 15 minutes. With a fourth physician the average wait falls to
5.33 minutes and the share waiting more than 15 minutes to 13.0 percent. The finance team estimates that a fourth
physician in this block costs USD 0.29m a year (given). The clinical director's targets are an average below 15
minutes and no more than 20 percent waiting longer than 15 minutes.

1. Write the governing thought in one sentence.
2. Write an executive summary of at most 200 words for the hospital's chief executive, answer first, with the ask and a
   date.
3. Draw a chart (on paper) that shows the choice, and write its action title.
4. List two questions the chief executive is likely to ask, and say where in your summary each is answered.
5. Measure your draft's words per sentence and compare it with the "after" memo in Worked example A.

## Connections to other cards

<!-- Guidance: Every analytical card ends in a recommendation to someone. Practise this card on the output of another. -->

- `mba/mba-case-write-up` and `mba/mba-case-prep-sheet`: the case method rewards an answer-first recommendation backed
  by analysis.
- `mba/mba-group-project-report` and `mba/mba-internship-final-presentation`: storylines and action titles at length.
- `mba/mba-case-interview-prep`: consulting interviews test structured, top-down communication of an answer.
- `mba/mba-queueing-card`, `mba/mba-cvp-breakeven-card` and `mba/mba-npv-irr-card`: sources of the numbers that a
  decision memo summarises.
- `mba/mba-ethics-guide` and `mba/mba-stakeholder-esg-card`: honest disclosure of downside and of who is affected.
- `business/memo`, `business/executive-summary`, `business/one-pager` and `startup/board-deck`: ready-to-fill formats.
- `writing/style-guide` and `data/dashboard-specification`: house style and chart standards.

## Common mistakes and misconceptions

<!-- Guidance: Use this list as a pre-send checklist. Read your document once for each item. -->

- **Chronological structure.** "First we did, then we found" makes the reader wait for the point. Lead with the answer.
- **Hedged recommendations.** "It may be worth considering" signals uncertainty the analysis may not justify. State
  the recommendation and put real uncertainty in a risk section with numbers.
- **Topic titles on slides.** "Financials" says nothing. A title is a sentence with a verb that states the conclusion.
- **Titles the chart does not prove.** Each title must be supported by the evidence on that slide; otherwise the reader
  stops trusting the deck.
- **Groups that overlap or miss something.** Reasons like "cost", "rent" and "profitability" overlap; rewrite them
  into distinct groups.
- **No ask, no deadline.** A decision memo ends with what you need from the reader and by when.
- **Hiding the downside.** Senior readers look for the weak point; showing it, with a mitigation, builds credibility.
- **Distorting charts.** Truncated bar axes, 3D effects, dual axes and inconsistent scales mislead even when every
  number is correct. Check the lie factor.
- **Too much on one slide.** One message per slide; move detail to an appendix.
- **Jargon and acronyms.** Write for the least specialised reader who must decide; define any term they may not know.
- **Numbers without context.** "USD 0.42m loss" means more next to revenue, the other stores and the cost of fixing it.

## Self-test questions

<!-- Guidance: Answer from memory, in writing, before scrolling to the answer key. Log every miss in your error log. -->

1. State the pyramid principle in two sentences.
2. What are the situation, complication and question in an introduction, and why should the situation contain nothing
   new to the reader?
3. Rewrite the slide title "Market overview" as an action title for a fictional slide showing that the market for
   warehouse robots grew 18 percent last year while Corvane's sales grew 31 percent.
4. What does MECE mean, and why does overlap between groups weaken an argument?
5. Compute the Flesch Reading Ease of a passage with 90 words, 6 sentences and 135 syllables. Give the Excel formula.
6. A line chart shows a cost rising from 100 to 104, drawn with an axis from 99 to 105 so the line rises across almost
   the whole height. Is that a problem in the same way as a truncated bar chart? Explain.
7. According to Cleveland and McGill (1984), which encoding is read most accurately, and what does that imply for a
   pie chart with seven slices?
8. List the five questions an executive summary should answer.
9. When would you not lead with the recommendation, and what would you do instead?
10. In Worked example A, why does the memo mention the zero-retention case, and what does its negative three-year NPV
    imply for the recommendation?

## My notes and next steps

<!-- Guidance: This section is yours. Keep one before-and-after pair from your own writing here as evidence of progress. -->

| Item | My entry |
|---|---|
| Confidence with business communication (1 = lost, 5 = could teach it) | [ ] |
| A recent document of mine and its governing thought in one sentence | [ ] |
| My before and after words per sentence | [ ] |
| Feedback received from a reader | [ ] |
| Mistakes logged in `mba/mba-error-log` | [Date and short description] |
| Next review date (spacing: +2 days, +1 week, +1 month) | YYYY-MM-DD |
| Next card or template to study | [mba/mba-case-write-up / mba/mba-internship-final-presentation] |

## Sources and further reading

<!-- Guidance: Cite the original works when you use an idea in an assignment. Books are named for further reading only. -->

- Minto, B. (2009). *The Pyramid Principle: Logic in Writing and Thinking* (rev. ed.). Financial Times Prentice Hall.
  Earlier editions from Minto International, London (a revised second edition is catalogued for 1978). (The pyramid structure, the question-and-answer dialogue and the situation, complication and question
  introduction.)
- Flesch, R. (1948). A new readability yardstick. *Journal of Applied Psychology*, 32(3), 221-233.
- Tufte, E. R. (1983). *The Visual Display of Quantitative Information*. Graphics Press. (Lie factor and data-ink
  ratio.)
- Cleveland, W. S., and McGill, R. (1984). Graphical perception: theory, experimentation, and application to the
  development of graphical methods. *Journal of the American Statistical Association*, 79(387), 531-554.
- US General Services Administration, Digital.gov. Plain language guide series (adapted from PlainLanguage.gov),
  https://digital.gov/guides/plain-language (accessed 2026-10-28). Public domain, US government work.
- OpenStax (2019). *Principles of Management*, chapter 16 on managerial communication,
  https://openstax.org/details/books/principles-management (accessed 2026-10-28). CC BY-NC-SA 4.0. Open resource.
- Further reading (by name only): Knaflic, *Storytelling with Data*; Few, *Show Me the Numbers*; Williams,
  *Style: Lessons in Clarity and Grace*; Zinsser, *On Writing Well*.

## Answer key

<!-- Guidance: Check your answers only after you have written your own. Your wording will differ; check the logic. -->

**Worked example B.** (1) Example titles: slide 2 "Our order backlog has grown for six quarters and now equals nine
months of output"; slide 4 "Two of our largest customers will not reorder at current lead times"; slide 5 "The second
line costs USD 14m and pays back in about four years in the base case"; slide 6 "A phased build limits our exposure if
automation spending slows"; slide 7 "... and phase two at the [month YYYY] review, once backlog and orders confirm
demand". (2) "Why act": slides 2, 3 and 4 (demand exceeds capacity and customers are at risk). "Why this option":
slides 5 and 6 (it pays back and the risk is managed). Slide 1 is the governing thought; slide 7 is the ask. (3) A line
chart of quarterly utilisation and lead time, or a bar of utilisation with a reference line at a sustainable level,
titled as on the slide; highlight the latest quarter. Link to `mba/mba-queueing-card`: at 94 percent utilisation waiting
time is on the steep part of the curve, which is why lead times doubled. (4) Situation: Corvane has grown on one
production line. Complication: demand now exceeds what the line can make, lead times have doubled and large customers
are at risk. Question: how should we add capacity without over-committing if the market slows?

**Exercise C.** Answers vary. A strong governing thought: "Add a fourth physician from 10:00 to 14:00 at USD 0.29m a
year: it cuts the average wait for a physician from 35 to 5 minutes and meets both clinical targets, which three
physicians miss by a wide margin." A strong summary states the recommendation, the two targets and the results with 3
and 4 physicians, the cost, the main risk (beds downstream may become the bottleneck; other hours not yet analysed) and
the ask with a date. A good chart: a bar or dot chart of the share waiting over 15 minutes with 3, 4 and 5 physicians
(52.0, 13.0 and 2.9 percent) and a reference line at the 20 percent target, titled "Four physicians meet the waiting
target; three do not". Likely questions: "Can we do it with a cheaper role?" and "What about other hours?", answered in
the options and next-steps lines.

**Self-test.**

1. Put the main conclusion at the top, then support it with a small number of grouped key points, each supported by
   evidence below it. Each level summarises the one below and answers the question the level above raises.
2. Situation: what the reader already knows and accepts; complication: what changed or what is at stake; question: what
   the reader now wants answered, which your governing thought answers. The situation contains nothing new so that the
   reader agrees with it and is ready to accept the complication.
3. Example: "The warehouse robot market grew 18 percent last year, and we grew faster, at 31 percent".
4. Mutually exclusive, collectively exhaustive: no overlap between groups and nothing missing. Overlap double-counts
   evidence and confuses the reader about which reason carries the weight.
5. $206.835 - 1.015 \times 15 - 84.6 \times 1.5 = 64.7$. Excel: `=206.835-1.015*(90/6)-84.6*(135/90)`.
6. Less so: a line chart encodes values by position, not by bar length, so a non-zero axis is acceptable when the
   change itself is the message. But the scale should not be chosen to exaggerate; label the axis clearly and give the
   change as a number (4 percent).
7. Position along a common scale. Angles and areas of seven slices are read inaccurately; a sorted bar chart shows the
   same data more accurately.
8. What is recommended (or concluded), why, how much it costs and returns, what the main risks are, and what is needed
   from the reader by when.
9. Examples: delivering bad news to people affected by it, a hostile audience, or a culture that expects context first.
   Know the answer, lead with shared facts and the problem, bring the reader to the conclusion, and still state the
   conclusion clearly and early enough.
10. Because the reader's first question is "what if the customers do not follow?". The negative NPV over three years
    shows the closure is not risk-free: the recommendation depends on keeping some customers, so the memo should state
    the retention needed and the actions to achieve it.

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